Hello out there. Ahhh, yes… Remember my *happy dance* anticipating the seasonal change? I can confirm. Spring is really, really, really here. For those of you like me afflicted with allergies, think positive. Summer is just a sneeze or three away.
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Another snippet from Rhythm, Smoke, Inc. 3:
No, no, no… Holly’s good mood evaporated as Marty left the bathroom and advanced on her, carrying a box in his hand.
“Explain this to me,” he growled,displaying one of the three home pregnancy kits she’d used and discarded.
“First of all, don’t snoop through my trash,” she answered grimly.
Judging his expression more belligerent than repentant, she continued,”In case you don’t understand the mechanics of reproduction, I’ll speak slowly. Remember the night of the dance when we had sex? Your sperm got loose, my eggs came out to play, and they tangoed.”
“I wore a condom…” he stuttered looking shell-shocked.
“Well obviously your brand sucks. It came off inside of me; not that you’d remember since you fell asleep as soon as you finished.”
Series Title: Smoke, Inc.
Marty Jones: I’ve got to be honest. I’ve always prided myself on my self-control. I even held it together when my wife, business partner, and the love of my life, died. But recently, I’ve felt myself unraveling, though I don’t know why. Smoke, Inc., the company Kit and I built together, is doing well. In fact, better than well since changing government policies offer new ways to make money.
Some opportunities are legal, others, the high paying jobs, possibly not. I’m dealing with it day by day, but being responsible for keeping the Smoke crew employed, paid, and alive, is taking its toll. I’m thirty-seven, feeling more like seventy three. I guess that’s why I signed up to participate in a charity dance-a-thon. Now all I need is a partner who knows how to shuffle her feet.
Holly Smith: I admit I have hermit tendencies. My two besties, and an almost aunt are the only three people standing between me and complete anonymity; but really, how many connections does a human being need? I work two or three jobs at a time to support my passion–remodeling my house. Right now I’m refreshing my kitchen, but the cost of new sink hardware has halted my project.
Lucky for me, Aunt Maxine ask for a favor. Her client needs a dance partner and she thought of me because, according to her, I can dance to the sound of two pennies bouncing on a floor. I’m not comfortable with being billed as one of Maxine’s Baby Doll escorts but it’s just a dance, and I’ll get paid enough to buy my fancy faucet, hopefully suffering nothing more than sore feet. What could go wrong?
Taboo Frequency–Cowboy Burn– Rhythm
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Um, oops! But, I’m so curious as to the results that were on those three pregnancy kits. I love the characters’s voices, and I’m very intrigued by this snippet!
She’s right–he shouldn’t be snooping through her trash–it’s an invasion of her privacy. I like her a lot!
I’m hoping that the carelessness he showed on the night of the dance doesn’t mean he’ll be careless about supporting her if she is, indeed, pregnant.
OMG … this was hilarious. Excellent dialogue and “explanations” … LOVE IT!
Sorry to hear about the allergies; stay strong haha. Not exactly the most enviable position they’re in right now; if she truly is pregnant, I sure hope his carelessness won’t carry over into his style of parenting.
Uh oh! I enjoyed the way the scene played out, felt very real indeed. Excellent excerpt! And I sympathize re the allergies – the cats and I have all been sneezing this week due to pollen.
Wow, it sounds like it wasn’t all that fun on the night of the dance. How could he even fall asleep so fast?
This person is carefully digging out weeds as of yesterday so bulbs may be planted. No sneezing in NY -only fear of falling.
Love the snippet-been there way too often in my long life. Many the oops moments and babies to follow.
Gem-you really are Gold.
I love the tone of this piece, Gem. Your dialogue is brilliant. Excellent job
Yikes! That has to be a shock.
I love her little dig about the night it all happened and him falling asleep right afterward.
Defensive remark to his attitude ‘that this can’t be happening’ scenario. lol
Great tone to the scene and so realistic when neither one is looking to start a family.
Yes – a real life situation.
Love her explanation — and that last line was sure a slap in the face!
I could just see his stunned expression. Great dialogue. I’m very interested to hear his reply.
LOL! The facts of life, indeed! Bird meet bee! Great excerpt, Gem!
Woo- she was quick on the comeback! Now I’m wondering about the test results …
I get a Kenalog shot at the end of March & Sept, which gives me about 3-4 months allergy free. It also makes me gain weight, but it’s totally worth it!
BURN! In many ways. This spanner is sure to make some interesting works to come.
Loved this scene! He’s a bit too cavalier and her explanation of what happened is hilarious. Together they have got to make beautiful music–and hopefully nothing else!
Ohhhh boy… I loved the dialogue though!
Great dialogue. Love how she “explains” the facts of life to him. This sounds like a fun story.
Poor things. That’s got to be a shock to the system. It happens all the time, though. Great scene.
I loved how she spoke slowly–describing the mechanics! Great character building, Gem! 🙂