Hi everyone! Since Cerise Amour releases on Thursday, April 10th and that’s this week, @_@ I’m continuing last week’s scene from Unlikely Gentlemen 2.5 (Cherry went to the bayou and stumbled onto a Confederate soldier). I’ve returned to my hero’s POV in this snippet.
Jeb heard the sounds of rescue before he stared up at deliverance. He’d been carried downstream by a torpid current, bleeding in the water all the way; finally he’d bumped against land and had just enough life left to crawl through mud and collapse in the marsh grass.
He was cold, and the water he’d swallowed had left him nauseous, not thirst quenched. But his eyes still worked, and, unless he was hallucinating, he was looking at a tall girl wearing glasses.
“It would be best,” she suggested, enunciating her words carefully as she peered down at him, “if you moved from those weeds before an alligator finds you.”
“Help me up,” he answered, extending his left arm toward her; too trustingly, she took his hand and tugged. If he lived another day, he’d tell her about the error of being too trusting. As it was, he struggled to rise, but fell back into the mud.
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interesting to think that when somebody’s helping you… makes me want to know more 🙂
Very descriptive snippet, I can see the mud and sense the danger he’s in if he doesn’t get out of there quickly!
Now that – is very intriguing. Great snippet.
I’m still wondering if she’s for the north or south as she’s helping this guy. And he’s right, she shouldn’t be so trusting…but it’s a good thing for him she is.
Very interesting. Love his thoughts about her safety, and her willingness to help the fallen soldier. I can’t wait to see more.
She’s calmer than I would probably be! I like his thoughts….this will be a very interesting story, judging by the excellent excerpt!
Vivid descriptions. (I had been wondering about alligators while reading about him being in the water, bleeding.)
Whoa, tough moment for him. I sure hope she helps him up before that gator shows up. Intriguing snippet!
I love how detached and calm she seems, considering the circumstances! This is getting better and better every week, Gem! 🙂
I liked your description of his situation — cold, nauseated, bleeding. Good picture of her aloofness too. Excellent excerpt.
Wonderful dialogue and descriptive writing, Gem! I could picture it. Nicely done!
I think she was trusting because he didn’t seem too dangerous but he still has a point.