Hi everyone. I’m so glad to be blogging again. I’ve been missing all the fun this summer while I revamped my website. Hope you get a chance to look around while you’re here.
For my first 8 back, I’m sharing a snippet from Outrageous Pride since Book II in my Unlikely Gentlemen series will be out soon. Let me know what you think of Kell’s Irish brogue. The challenge was to alter the way he phrased his thoughts and sprinkle in his Irish expressions and accented words–but not enough to become irritating or beyond understanding. I’m hoping I’ve gotten the balance right.
“Tá tú iontach álainn,” you are very beautiful, Kell muttered in Gaelic when he looked upon the vision of loveliness crouched on the floor.
“What?” she asked, giving him a perplexed stare from eyes as blue as the River Lagan. Instead of accurately translating, Kell squatted in front of her and brushed his fingers across the smudge on her nose.
“A wee speck of dirt has taken up residence here.” He could see the incongruity of his scarred knuckles against her delicate flesh and it surprised him that she didn’t flinch from his big paw. When he removed the streak of dust and unnecessarily dragged the back of his hand across her flushed cheek, nothing had ever felt as exquisite as the silken skin beneath his calloused touch.
Bluidy hell--as Kell savored the look of her moist pink lips, the dimples that indented each rosy cheek, and the tiny creased laugh lines fanning from the corners of her beautiful eyes, his usually quite sensible cock became unruly. And then the miscreant reared its foolish head, unfurled into full stance, and left him shifting from thigh to thigh, trying to disguise his condition.
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Bluidy hell indeed. 🙂 Sure he got her cheeks to flush, but it’s the affected she had on him that I loved.
Great scene. Just enough of the Irish lilt, too. 🙂
Great snippet!! This scene is just packed with excellent word choices and vivid imagery. I can really feel and picture this!
seems good to me and I can just see him shifting from foot to foot lol
G8t job! Just the right balance, methinks! His tongue lies, but his body can’t! LOL!
The Irish brogue sounds nice to my ear : )
Well done!
WOW, Gem. This is wonderful. Loved it. Loved the writing, the authenticity and his tenderness.
I like the organization of your new website. I don’t know if you had your picture on your old site (maybe I just missed it), but I finally got to see your photo! Cool.
Such an unruly annoyance! 😀
I LOVE it! Bluidy hell is now my favorite expression LOL and I totally enjoyed the way this snippet ended. Excellent excerpt!
Loving this story, Gem! You’ve done a great job with spicing it up with just enough Irish. 🙂
Nice lilt. I so like the contrasts between her delicate skin and great beauty against his rough paws. Nice touch that unwieldy “miscreant.”
Great to read your work again Gem, wondered where you’d got to! Love the new blog and I enjoyed this snippet, especially the way you describe Kell’s upcoming problem!
LOL oh no! He’s been caught liking her. 😀 Great snippet, Gem. I liked how you translated the Gaelic and even the “bluidy hell” is perfect. Nicely done. 🙂
Too much (and it doesn’t take much) dialect causes me to stop reading.
This is fine. Nice choice of words.
It’s romantic and lyrical I thought, and just the right amount of Irish. 🙂 I enjoy reading romance from the male perspective. He’s quite the charmer I think.
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Wonderful! I love the accent. He’s adorable.
“…miscreant reared its foolish head…” OMG, that’s fabulous! What a great excerpt, and the site is beautiful!
But what’s she doing on the floor?
I’m just wondering when was the last time the River Lagan was blue.
Thanks for that tip, Linda. I asked about the River Lagan on FB and a friend reported that it is a “dark, murky blue.” 😀 May have to revise her eye color a tad. lol
LOL Nice to see the man in the scene being the one feeling uncomfortable! Great snippet!
Steamy snippet!