Hi everyone. I’m taking a break from the Old West this week to share a snippet from my current wip which is a contemporary romantic suspense. I’m working in first person POV in this series (Smoke, Inc.) and it’s a nice change-up from my third person voice in the Eclipse Heat books.
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Creative punctuation to get this scene in ten. No cover, working title, Rhythm.
“I’m Marty Jones; let’s get this show on the road,” my dance partner growled his introduction and reached for me, frowning down as if I’d kept him waiting.
“I’ve been ready for an hour,” I answered turning my back on him to dance solo, leaving him to figure out how to follow. My partners until now had been shorter than me so I always navigated.
“I’m boss,” Marty disagreed.
Suddenly, his long legs framed my long legs, his big thighs plastered to the back of mine, and his hand moved from where he’d placed it on my hip to my stomach. He surrounded me with his body, demonstrating his authority as he pressed me backward against his massive frame.
He rocked left, my body followed; he rocked right…yeah, you get the picture; he was stronger than me and had me locked in place.
”Okay, tutorial over,” I muttered.
“Ready?” he murmured in my ear right before he snapped me out, unfurling me like a ribbon at the end of his arm. When he pulled me back, I wasn’t prepared for the lift and toss; before he caught me, I’d shrieked louder than Little Richard screaming Good Golly Miss Molly.
©Gem Sivad 2016
He wants to demonstrate his dominance. I wouldn’t be pleased.
Ready? I’m wondering if he means something other than the dance. Nice snippet!
Well that was great! I could really visualize the scene and I cannot WAIT for more of this! Terrific snippet…
Someone needs to be taught a lesson, I think, and it’s not the narrator.
Great snippet–love the first person POV–and the last line about Little Richard.
Wow, they are both very dominant. I have a feeling there is going to be a huge power struggle between the two of them. Intriguing snippet!
Fantastic imagery. I could see the dance and feel the ‘dance of wills’. Had me chuckling at the last line. Yep, could hear that scream.
I like the two already. I have a feeling this is going to be fun to read. great dialogue and descriptiosn!
This is a dance of pure masculine power, it seems to me.
I was thinking the same thing.
I love the last paragraph, really shows the characters personality.
ROFL. Well, she hadn’t seen THAT coming! I didn’t either, to be honest. I get the feeling she isn’t going to let that slide and is going to get him back. You know what they say, payback is a bitch.